Sunday, December 20, 2009

Event: Official Kissing Day Blogfest - The Excerpt



Events

Official Kissing Day Blogfest

The following is an excerpt from the spy thriller I'll be finishing by New Year's called Sin City Zion:

Phoebe stood in front of the highrise window looking out over the strip. She hugged her arms around her as much from the air conditioning as from the chill of fear. Nick came up behind her and rubbed the goosebumps from her arms.

“How are you doing?”

“I don’t know,” she said, surprised by the honesty of her response. Her stiff upper lip was failing her. She put her head on his chest. “Do you think they’re all right?”

“Sure. Don’s probably got the Detsois holed up in a place even swankier than this.” His voice managed an upbeat tone, but Phoebe felt the hard thumping of his heart.

“What are we going to do, Nick?”

“I don’t know yet.”

He always knew.

She felt tears welling. To push them away she did the first thing that came to mind. She kissed him.

To find the other writers participating in this blog carnival, visit Sherrinda's blog: http://sherrindak.blogspot.com/2009/12/post-your-link-for-official-kissing-day.html

19 comments:

  1. My favorite line was "He always knew." Great scene, thanks for sharing.

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  2. Ah! Kiss as distraction! You can't not love that kind! Thanks for sharing your scene!

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  3. That should always be the first thing to come to mind. :)

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  4. I want more! lol. Nice job, but now I want to know what happened before and what happens after :-)

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  5. I agree with Natalie. That has to be my favorite line as well. I want to know what is happening, you hooked me! Thanks for sharing!

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  6. Short and sweet! Great stuff, Heidi!

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  7. A kiss as a distraction is wonderful, but I agree with Karen, I want to know more! :-)

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  8. When all else fails, KiSS! Awesome! Thanks so much for participating today! You helped make it so much fun!

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  9. Very nice, Heidi. I agree with Karen, makes me want to read more. I also loved the He always knew. line. Very evocative.

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  10. Ha ha!

    Mine IS the shortest I've seen so far. Probably because I don't write many kissing scenes and this was the start of a chapter in the last quarter of the book.

    I'm still not sure if works well (the kiss, that is), but thanks for reading.

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  11. Hmm, kissing to CONCEAL emotion. She's got her tricks, that one. ;-)

    Thank you so much for your visit and kind remarks. :-)

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  12. Oh, this reminds me a little of a kiss-for-cover scene I wrote a while ago.

    Man, I loved that scene ;) . Any excuse to kiss, right?

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  13. I love reading all the different motivations people have for kissing! So she doesn't cry? I like it :-)

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  14. I like that. Get right to the point and kiss him already.

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  15. *sighs* Your writing is gorgeous. I love the kiss for distraction. So good! :)

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  16. OOh, I love this. Rubbing the goosebumps is way hott! And the last line is awesome.


    Nice job with the Kissing Day! I totally did it on my blog along with my contest!

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  17. Short and sweet!
    When all else fails...kiss!
    And then sneak off with his wallet (you did say this was a spy thriller!)

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