tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post8099494307792203461..comments2023-09-16T12:03:11.610-04:00Comments on HEIDI RUBY MILLER: SFFS: Snippet from GREENSHIFT #7Heidi Ruby Millerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02190166838730021237noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-85231514849248712912012-02-06T05:10:01.779-05:002012-02-06T05:10:01.779-05:00Love all the detail in this, but don't like th...Love all the detail in this, but don't like the inference that he won't pay for damaged goods. What the hell does he think she it?Pippa Jayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15146591827060731958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-89938025802624154432012-02-04T19:57:22.175-05:002012-02-04T19:57:22.175-05:00Really sinister toward the end.Really sinister toward the end.Sue Ann Bowlinghttp://homecomingbook.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-63719684068641544552012-02-04T19:22:18.359-05:002012-02-04T19:22:18.359-05:00Is he about to get his butt kicked?
I really love...Is he about to get his butt kicked?<br /><br />I really loved this snippet! I love the way you get to see this party boy through her eyes.<br /><br />I can't wait to read this one.JC Casselshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12359245589507445547noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-82164826606973114902012-02-04T16:33:44.906-05:002012-02-04T16:33:44.906-05:00Interesting! More of this young man, please!? Grea...Interesting! More of this young man, please!? Great stuff. You take it so slowly, yet keep the story moving along nicely (something I'm bad at).LaurelCKrieglerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08874628866547175842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-3726979360312748462012-02-04T16:15:01.868-05:002012-02-04T16:15:01.868-05:00Ha ha, Patrick!
Alcide might be too big and strap...Ha ha, Patrick!<br /><br />Alcide might be too big and strapping to be Liu, but thanks for the nice image. ;)Heidi Ruby Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02190166838730021237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-76223232266789754182012-02-04T12:43:14.378-05:002012-02-04T12:43:14.378-05:00I keep picturing the guy that plays Alcide on True...I keep picturing the guy that plays Alcide on True Blood as the pink-shirted man in this snippet. Great stuff here!Patrick Stutzmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06701695102224164322noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-7693907370729100742012-02-04T10:59:35.600-05:002012-02-04T10:59:35.600-05:00Ooohh want to know more about this vaccine! The ha...Ooohh want to know more about this vaccine! The handsome man might need to be put in his place.Melisse Aireshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01478569639424075550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-73390919671278753652012-02-04T10:27:07.986-05:002012-02-04T10:27:07.986-05:00Such cockiness! Hehe, loved it. Something tells me...Such cockiness! Hehe, loved it. Something tells me he's a handful!TK Toppinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00192845664117376346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-65727003225234176092012-02-04T10:25:46.903-05:002012-02-04T10:25:46.903-05:00You really pack a lot into a scene. I knew where s...You really pack a lot into a scene. I knew where she was coming from (in her head) and hints of the conflict ahead when you have a character who is attractive yet heavy with attitude. There's usually disappointment on the way. Good use of details in thoughts. The dialogue works too.Terry LaBarbahttp://authorterry.motd.org/?p=1noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-54264483783940803042012-02-04T10:14:04.092-05:002012-02-04T10:14:04.092-05:00I was really excited to read your snippet. It was ...I was really excited to read your snippet. It was amazing. The dialogue was great and you did an excellent job of creating tension between the characters. I also loved the description of dialogue. Unfortunately, I agree with Gayle. He might not be the nicest person.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-56939928315155711472012-02-04T09:16:33.848-05:002012-02-04T09:16:33.848-05:00T.M. - I'm more partial to dialog, too, but I ...T.M. - I'm more partial to dialog, too, but I thought I should mix it up. ;)<br /><br />Gayle - he is even worse than you think.Heidi Ruby Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02190166838730021237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-12629104122108498172012-02-04T08:37:53.357-05:002012-02-04T08:37:53.357-05:00I liked the description of the guy, but he sounds ...I liked the description of the guy, but he sounds like a bit of an a*se.:)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07039391701819796271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-56698855223343954272012-02-04T08:09:44.729-05:002012-02-04T08:09:44.729-05:00Love this scene...but I liked the dialogue more. I...Love this scene...but I liked the dialogue more. It made me smile... :-)T. M. Hunterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04315726033990784930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-54786055107651284362012-02-04T07:13:32.068-05:002012-02-04T07:13:32.068-05:00Thanks! This one is from the opening chapter of GR...Thanks! This one is from the opening chapter of GREENSHIFT.Heidi Ruby Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02190166838730021237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31505433.post-63977783419142774242012-02-04T06:36:13.026-05:002012-02-04T06:36:13.026-05:00This is one loaded and 'charged' snippet!
...This is one loaded and 'charged' snippet!<br /><br />"She couldn’t see any tan lines where the bronze skin disappeared beneath the waistband of his beige linen pants."<br /><br />Ah, the little things we notice...<br /><br />And all those details that reveal all sorts of interesting bits of info: "They were how her eyes used to look before the vaccine turned them golden-orange."<br /><br />Really great stuff.Cary Caffreyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02497153478198948932noreply@blogger.com